Monday, February 21, 2011

magpie #54


~magpie


My Puzzle

I can't believe I acted so surprised when
you chose her over me.

I expected my world to fall apart.
But it didn't, because
it was already in fragmented pieces.
Pieces from my broken smiles and
your broken promises.

Yet, I walked away.
Earth under my feet and
sun on my shoulders.

Determined,
ever ready and ever steady,
to put it all back together once again.

Only I know where the
pieces of my life fit.

19 comments:

  1. great phrases -broken smiles and broken promises-
    and I love how it ends, those last two lines are really empowering.

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  2. love this. glad to see you writing again

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  3. Oh I do love this. It is good to walk away sometimes...

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  4. I love the last line. Very well done!

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  5. Well done - both the words and the action...

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  6. Ah, I love this! It is so true! Sometimes we have to walk away and put back together the broken pieces of our lives! Great writing! :o)

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  7. I've been there ~ more than once!

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  8. Full of hope, overcoming heartache..what it's all about..Good!!

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  9. Love it! Here's mine! Also, how can I join #reverb10 on twitter? Does someone list me in there? If so, have someone list me in! I'd love to share my story out there, what do you think? My username is MsMatsui, if you are interested.

    Here's my Magpie http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2011/02/magpie-tales-extras-1.html

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  10. Ah, the strength of earth and sun.

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  11. Loved the sun on your shoulders and the ending is spot on!

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  12. Full of determination...great ..
    wonderful poem..
    Here is my Magpie
    http://poem-myworldofexcitement.blogspot.com/2011/02/poem52a-puzzle.html

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  13. I really liked how you used the prompt to express your thoughts/poem. Outstanding. Very well done.

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  14. Wow! Stunning power, brave determination to move forward from broken promises. Fantastic piece! I believe I will join the journey here to observe.

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  15. I liked this very much. . .
    'Only I know where the
    pieces of my life fit.' - how true!

    Really nice writing!

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  16. Great piece. Love the last sentence.

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  17. great to know that you know where you are and how to fix your puzzles.
    cheers.

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  18. welcome join poets rally week 39, share a free or old random poem, make new poetic friends, have your work fully represented by the end of the rally..


    thanks for the time.
    Happy Writing.
    Hope to see you in.
    xoxox

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